Spring is coming

Standing on the balcony
Feeling the gentle breeze
Looking out
Sunshine overshines
Morning dew kisses green grass
Pink cherry blossoms fill a road with sweet fragrance

Going outside
Opening arms towards the blue sky
Smelling scents of the earth
Breathing fresh air
Playing with jumping squirrels
Singing together with flying birds

Spring is coming

Comments

  1. How about Morning dews kiss green grass?

    Going outside, or go outside?

    How about Smelling scent of the earth?


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    1. Thank you! Dews can be better because there is more than one dew. I'm not sure about going outside or go outside. Maybe both scents and scent are ok.

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    2. I love how you both are using this thread to engage in further conversations about revising! You've hit on an important point in both of your comments, George -- even though "dew" is something that sounds like it would be singular, it actually is something called a "collective noun" - which basically means it's understand as referring to multiple things. (https://www.collinsdictionary.com/us/dictionary/english/collective-noun for more info!) So the use of "dew" in the poem is spot on :)
      If you want to say "scent" instead of "scents", just add "the" , so you'd say: "Smelling THE scent of the earth"

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  2. I can feel your feeling through your words, Feeling refreshed, comfortable.

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